my first mva fanic

[drcockroach]

MvA ch1 B-day Bummer

Beep, beep, beep, beep…..
Aw…. What day is it? October 17. (I muttered to myself as I look at my alarm clock to see what day it is)
Finally, today is my birthday! Hmm… I wonder where my mom is. As I got out of bed and got dressed, I went off to look for my mom. When I got to the kitchen, I found a note that said, “Dear Magalie, I have a little surprise for you in the back, love mom.” I went outside and in my surprise all my friends and family were in the back and threw me a surprise party.
Me: Mom, did you do all this just for me?
My Mom: No, it was all your little friends’ idea.
Me: Aww… You guys, you shouldn’t have. (I gave each and one of my friends a hug)
When I was done hugging my friends who threw me the party, I went off to say hi to everyone who came to the party. But all of a sudden, someone from behind me gave me a big bear hug. When I turned around to see who gave me the hug, it was my boyfriend Jake.
Me: Jake, I can’t believe you’re here. I thought my mom didn’t want you to come over here anymore?
Jake: Ya I know, but I have to tell you something. Sigh, I’m breaking up with you.
Me: What? You’re breaking up with me, why?
Jake: I met someone else; actually I’ve been dating her for two months now.
Me: you cheated on me and you are breaking up with me on my birthday? (All of a sudden, I feel a tingling sensation going threw my whole body and then for some reason I turned on fire!)
Jake: What’s going on here? (I hear my friends and family running and screaming for there lives)
I ran into the water and ran inside my room packing all my stuff so I can just run away from everyone at the party. After I gathered all of my things, I ran to the front door, but I was stopped by an army of men wearing camouflaged uniform that surrounded me in my house.
Soldier: General we have the monster surrounded, what should we do now? … Copy that.
Then for some reason, all of the soldiers threw nets at me.
Me: Leave me alone! Why are you doing this to me? (As soon as I said that, blades came out of my hands like wolverine from X-men. I cut threw all the nets but I got shot in the back of my neck with a tranquilizer dart.)
Me: Augh… Boom... I fell hard on to the floor.
General that’s enough! The poor girl has enough damage as it is. (I hear some guy with a British accent) Wait a minute… We need to take to the facility now!!! She is loosing too much blood!
Me: I didn’t even notice but when I fell, I fell straight on top of the dart and the dart made a huge rip on the back of my neck making me gush out tons and tons of blood.
Here Doc, let me carry her, you just get her bag and I’ll carry her onto the plane. (I here a strong, muscular man, like a jock of some sort took me on to the plane) Hurry Doc we don’t have that much time left for her!
Me: I fell into a comma seconds later.

[drcockroach]

MVA ch2

Me: Oooo… What happen, how did I get here and why am I wearing a jumpsuit? (As I looked around to see that I was in a prison cell of some sort?)
A voice: Aw… I see that you are up now my dear. (A half man, half cockroach hybrid approaches me.) Don’t be afraid of me my dear, my name is Dr. Cockroach Ph. D. you can call me Dr. C or doc if you want to.
Me: ok… Hi, Doctor C, my name is Magalie and I want to know why I’m here and why am I hooked on to this machine?
Dr. C: now calm down my dear. You’re in a facility where they keep us monsters and the machine you are hooked on is to tell me that you are ok and not in any trouble. Back at your house when you got hit by the tranquilizer dart, you fell right on top of it and the dart made a whole in the back of your neck making you loose a lot of blood.
Me: Ok then. Wait, did you say there are more monsters here than me and you here?
Dr. C: Why yes of course my dear, do you want to get acquainted with them?
Me: Sure why not. But can you first unhook me from the machine?
Dr. C: why yes of course my dear, I almost forgot that you were hooked on to the machine.
As soon as Dr. C finished unhooking me from the machine, he took me to a room were the monsters were waiting to see if I was ok.
Dr. C: Everyone, I want you to meet the girl we got yesterday. (He introduce to everyone in the room) Magalie I like you to meet Susan, B.O.B, Link, and insecta.
Me: hi there. (I said nervously as I hide behind doctor cockroach)
Link: Wow. Look at you. (He said to me like he was trying to make a move on me)
Susan: Now Link behave your self. You’re scaring her.
B.O.B: It’s a girl?
Link: Yes B.O.B, Magalie is a girl.
B.O.B: No way, it’s a boy. Just look at his boobies. (He said and pointed one of his gooey fingers near my chest)
Dr.C: Link I thought you gave B.O.B ‘the talk’ a long time ago?
Link: Well I’ve been busy lately. Dr. C: sorry about that Magalie, as you can see B.O.B has no brain.
Me:It’s ok but not to interrupt in your conversation but were the hell is all my stuff at?
Susan: O... Sorry, I have it. Here you go and you look familiar, have we meet before?
Me: I think so?
Susan: Can you tell me your last name?
Me: It’s Mittwer, my name is Magalie Mittwer.
Susan: OMG, Magalie is that you? It’s me remember, I was your next door neighbor when you were 15! I was the one who helped you on you homework and taught you how to dance a little.
Me: Susan Murphy, it’s been so long! I missed you when you moved from my neighborhood. Me:A… link? Can you introduce me to your friend over there?
Link: You mean insecta over there. Ok.
As link takes me to see insecta I think to myself, “Wow, link is really cute and strong too. I should thank him for everything he has done for me.)
Link: Hey insecta, I want you to meet the new girl.
Me: Hi Insecta, my name is Magalie. I hope we can be friends?
Insecta: Screeeeeeeeeeech.
Link: Insecta said hi and she too hopes that you and her will be friends.
(As we got off from Insecta, I stopped link and told him thanks.)
Me: Hey link, thank you for everything you did for me.
Link: What do you mean for ‘everything’? All I did was help you get to know insecta?
Me: Well back at my house I heard you tell Dr. C to get my things and you were going to take me on to the plane. No one in my whole life ever helped me when I got hurt. So thank you. (I gave him a hug and a little kiss on the cheek too before I ran to Susan in the other side of the room)
Me: Hey Susan can I talk with you for a minute?
Susan: Sure thing Magalie, what do want to talk about? As she raised me up to her shoulder.
Me: well I think I have a crush on link. But I have no idea if he likes me or not?
Susan: Aw, how cute. I think link has a little crush on you too.
Me: how do you know?
Susan: Well back on the plane, Link was holding you very close to him and wasn’t taking his eyes off of you like he was trying to make you feel safe.
Me: Thanks Susan for sharing that with me and Susan, Do you know what day is it?
Susan: Why it’s October 18.
Me: What? It’s already the 18TH! Aw man. (I said it so loud that the others rushed up Susan’s shoulder to see what happen)
Dr. C: What’s wrong my dear, is something bothering you?
Me: (sigh) well yesterday was my birthday and I spent my entire birthday in a comma and I didn’t even make my birthday wish.
Link: It’s ok, hey maybe we can ask Monger if we can throw you a party since you missed it yesterday.
Dr. C: that’s a good idea link; we will ask Monger as soon as we see him.
Me: thanks you guys, your guys are true friends. They all gathered around me and gave me a big huge to cheer me up.
Me: today is the best day ever, I made new friends and now I know there are other people in the world who have the same problem as me. This day can’t get any better than this!

[Baycrum]

I think you need to change the title for this thread to something because it seemed like you were going to put a new thread for each chapter.Do you have a name for the Fanfic?
Also some writing suggestions:
Can you take it a little slower?Be discriptive?Don't just tell us,show us.Don't worry I have a hard time with this too.
Also...ummm the dialogue.....Can you try umm maybe:

As I walked in I was startled by one word:"SURPRISE!"
"Mom,did you do this all for me?"I asked as I walked towards my mom to hug her."No,it was all your little friends' idea."My mom replyed cheerfully.

Just some suggestions.Hope that helps!

[drcockroach]

no but i like to name each chapter like what each chapter is about and i'll try.I wrote this a long time ago

[Baycrum]

Oh okay!It interesting!

[drcockroach]

thanks.there 13 all together with one alternate ending

[drcockroach]

Ch3

Man today can't get any better, i made new friends that have the same interest as me, I found out that I can transform into anyone or anything and now I don't have to see my traitor of a boyfriend again. (I said to myself) An hour has past and I was talking to link about my karate training.
Link: So Magalie, how long have you been doing Karate?
Me: I've doing it for a while now. So link,what do you do around here anyway?
Link: well sometimes we have to fight a monster or something in different places in the world or we just relax here at the facility. there are also days that we do some training. It all depends on what Monger has for us.
Me:That sounds like fun. By the way, who's Monger?
Link:O ya, you haven't met him yet. Don't worry, you'll meet him soon enough.
As soon as Link finished talking, a man wearing a jet pack files in. He looked liked he was in his mid fifty's or so and in my head he must be Monger, the one link was talking to me about.
Monger: Well it looks like little missy right here is getting along just fine.
Link: Ya, she's great.
Monger: Ok then. Mam please follow me, it is time for your orientation.
Me: Ok.
As i left the room, i saw all my friends went back to there cell's.
Monger: Now listen hear little missy...
Me:Ok let me stop you there for a moment, can you call me by my real name 'Magalie' or by my nickname 'KG'? (as i interrupted him in mid sentence)
Monger: Very well then.Magalie, you are given two options. The first one is that you can stay here and join the monsters team and help them on there missions or two, you can stay here but you can't see your fellow inmates. So which will it be? (he said with a grin on his face)
Me: I'll choose the first one.
Monger: Very well then.
(after i told him my answer, we past the other monsters cell's and we stopped at an empty one)
Monger:This is your cell. It's right next to the missing links cell.
Me: Thank you general. It's perfect, it's like I'm back home.(my cell had my bag with all my stuff in it and a table with a chair.I walked inside to my cell.)
Monger: your welcome and by the way, the government has changed your name to Transformica.
Me:Wait... What?(but it was to late, the cell door closed on me) Ok Magalie, just relax. your still you, just think of it as a new beginning for you. (sigh) i wounder why all this stuff always happens to me?
As i walk towards the bed, i notice a card on top. I picked it up and inside it said, "happy birthday Magalie, love Link". Aw, thank you link(i muttered to myself). I laid down onto the bed and cried myself to sleep.

[drcockroach]

ch4

It's all ready been two weeks now here at the facility and me and my friends were relaxing around in the main room. I was at the table drawing in my sketch pad, Dr. Cockroach was making a super computer out of a pizza box, two cans of hair spray and a paper clip, Susan was playing with her hair, Link was talking to Insecta, and Bob was staring at the door for Monger to come out to tell us what we have to fight today.
Me:(in my head) Wow it's all ready been 2 weeks and I should tell Link that i like him soon.
Dr. C: Magalie, who are you drawing?
Me:Oh it's you Dr. C (as i regain my train of thought), if you must know, I'm drawing Link. As you can see from the picture, I already drew you, Susan, Insecta, Bob and myself. (I told him with a little grin on my face)
Dr. C: My dear, this picture that you drew is amazing!
Me: Really? Wow, no one ever said that about my art work before. Wait... Are you telling the truth or are you just toying with me?
Dr. C: My dear, I would never toy around one's emotion like that, and yes really, this is the finest peace of art I had ever seen. Your quite of an artiest aren't you?
Me: Yea and thanks, I just hope that... (sigh) never mind, it's nothing.
Dr. C: My dear, is there something bothering you because if there is you know you can talk to me about it.
Me: Ok. Well, two weeks ago, Link made me a birthday card and I wanted to thank him for it but in the same time I also want to tell him that i really like him but I don't Know if feels the same way for me as well. See, I'm one of those people who can't express their true feelings to another. Your just laughing at this, aren't you? (as i looked up at him with a small fake grin on my face)
Dr. C: My dear, that's not something you should be ashamed of, it's quite common for people and even I'm shy to tell my crush that I love her.
Me: Really, you too?
Dr. C: yes, even I as well.
Me: thanks for sharing that with me and I've figured out who you have a crush on.
Dr. C:Oh really? (as he crosses his arms in the chair) Then tell me my dear, who do I have a crush on?(raising up one eyebrow)
Me: You have a crush on Susan, don't you Doc?
Dr. Cockroach immediately blushed and froze that I actually figured out who he has a crush on.
Dr. C: Ho.... How did you find out?
Me: Well a few days ago, Link told me that after you guys defeated the giant robot on the golden gate bridge that you told Susan that shes the cat's 'Me-wow'. That and i see you get a tad nervous when you are around her.
Dr. C: Why your a clever one.
Me: thanks and don't worry doctor, I won't tell no one your secret as long as you don't tell anyone my secret. Deal? ( As i stuck out my hand for him to shake)
Dr. C: Deal.
We shook each others hands and we were done, Monger flies in.
Monger: Monsters, we have a problem.

[drcockroach]

ch5

Monger:Monsters, we have a problem.
Susan:What is it general?
Monger:well when Hurricane Katrina hit New Orleans, it hit a radiation plant that spilled into a bayou.Thus turning a small frog in to 'The Ribbinator'. Our wepons had no effect on him so you guys have to capture him.
Me:(in my head, I already conducted a plan to capture the frog)General, I know a way to capture the giant frog.
Monger: ok then, since you know how to get him, you'll be the leader for this mission Transformica. So, what do we need for the mission then?
Me:Ok, general bring Insecta's light and the cage and put then inside the jet, I'll tell you the rest when we get inside.
Monger:Affirmative.(he gets them and waits for me and the others in the jet)
Me:Dr. Cockroach, you wouldn't have by any chance a hologram projector and a cloaking field?
Dr. C:Why actually I do have those things.
Me:Good, can you go and get them and meet us on the plane.
Dr. C: All right then.
he ran to his room to get the things.
Me: Link, I need you to tell Insecta that she can't come with us on this mission because if that giant frog see's her, he will think that she's lunch for him.
Link: Sure thing Magalie. (He climbs on to Insecta and tells her what I said)
Me: Link, when your done talking to Insecta, go inside the jet and I'll tell you the rest from there.
Link:Got it.
Me:come on you guys follow me and I'll tell you my plan when were inside.
We all went inside the jet and we were set of to New Orleans.
Dr. C:So Magalie, why did you ask us to bring all this stuff any way and how are they going to help us capture the giant frog?
Me: I'll tell you right now. The reason why I asked for Insecta's lights,a hologram projector, and the coaxing field is that I know a way we can capture the Ribbinator faster and easier too.
Everyone just stared at me with a look on there face saying "What the hell is she talking about? How is all this going to get that giant frog?"
Me:Let me explain, Doctor the reason why I ask you for your hologram projector because we can make a hologram of Insecta and use it as bate. I also asked for the cloaking field because if that frog see's you Doc, he might eat you, so you'll be hiden when the plan is in action.
Dr. C:Brilliant! But why did you ask General Monger for Insecta's lights?
Me:Well if that plan doesn't work, we can use the lights and hypnotize 'The Ribbonater'. See, back in middle school, I learned that if you put a bright light in front of a frogs eyes, they will stand still, almost like when Insecta sees a bright light but she follows them. So when he is Hypnotize, Me and Susan can just scoop him inside the cage.
Link: Ok, that sounds like a good plan to me and an easy on too.
Monger: Monsters, were here.

[drcockroach]

ch6

Me: Ok general. Are you guys ready for this?
All: Were ready!(they said confidently)
We walked out side and in front of us was the giant frog.
Me: O...M...G...
Susan: Magalie, which plan should we use?
Me: I think we should start with plan two. Monger, tell the boys in the jet to put the lights on in front of the frog's eyes.
Monger: Sure thing Transformica. You heard her Men, put those lights in front of The Ribbinators eyes.
Me: General, tell them to do it fast before he spots us and hopes away.
Monger: And step on it!
the jet holding Insecta's lights, flew to the eyes of the frog and has hypnotized The Ribbinator.
Me: Good, phase one of the plan is checked off, now time for phase two.(I muttered to myself) General, where's the cage?
Monger: It's right over there.
Me: Thanks and you did say that my suit will change into any thing like me right?
Monger: Affirmative.
Me: How about size? will it do that as well?
Monger:The jump suit that you are wearing will also allow you to change your height as well.
Me:Thanks, that's all I need to know.(after Monger said that, I started to grow and grew to be as tall as Susan.)Ok, Susan can you help me carry the cage.
Susan:Sure, Ok.
Me: You guys, you need to tell us if the frog is in between the enterence of the cage.
all of them:Got it.
Susan: Pick it up on three?
Me:ya
Susan:1...2..3!
We picked up the cage and set it in front of the frog.
Me:good, phase two is done, now on to phase three.(i muttered, I then got back to my normal size and ran to Dr. C.)Dr. Cockroach, do have the hologram projector?
Dr.C:Good, I need you to put it inside the cage and show the pic of insecta. And when you come out, turn on the cloaking field.
Dr.c:ok
he runs inside the cage a put on the hologram and ran back to us.
Me:General, tell your men to turn off the lights.
Monger:Ok
As soon as the lights were off, the over grown toad go's for the bate.
Me:Link, as soon as the frog is in the cage completely, help me close the door.(i whispered to him)
Link:Gotcha(he whispers back)
Me:(the frog is inside the cage)Now Link, Now!
Me and Link closed the cage and has now captured The Ribbinator.
Monger:Great job monsters! You've captured the monster in fraction of the time you have ever did and for that, I'll allow you to stay for a while to check out New Orleans.
All of us:Thanks general.
When General Monger left, Susan, Dr.C, and Bob went into town and played tourist, but Link and I stayed at the bayou.
Me:Wow, this place looks amazing.
Link:Yea. Magalie,there something I want to tell you.
Me:ok and Link, there is something I what to tell you as well, how about we just tell each other at the same time?
Link: That sounds good.On three?
Me:Ok.1...
Link:2...
Me:3
both of us:I love you.You do?
Me: ok wait, you love me?
Link: well yea. I love you a lot and you feel the same way about me?
Me:yea, I feel in love with you the minute I saw you.
Link:Same here.So is this the part were we kiss now because right now, I really want to kiss you.
Me:yes and I also feel the same way right now.
We were about to kiss but before our lips even touched, I was stopped by a mere vision in my mind.
Me:Aaaaaaaaaaaaaa.....(I screamed on the top of my lungs as the vision flashed in my mind as if I was getting struck by lightning)Whats happening to me?Aaaaaaaaaaaaa...
Link:Magalie whats wrong?(he said to me in fear)
Me:I...Don't...Know...Aaaaa...(the vision stopped and I fainted into links arms and once again fell into a comma)
Link:Magalie, Magalie! Wake up.(I said to her in a worried tone as I saw her not moving in my arms)Oh no, I need to find the others and fast.(I carried her in my arms(bridal style) and went off to search for my friends)Don't worry, you'll be ok,Please be ok.(I muttered to her with tears streaming down my face)

[drcockroach]

Ch7

~~~~~~~[Vision Flash Back]~~~~~~~~~~~~

What's happening here, where am I?(I look around to find out that I was in a mother ship and an alien has me in his grip)
I was struggling to get out of his grip but it was no use, he was to strong for me.
Alien: Its no use for you to struggle out of my grip! Your trap and no one is here to save you.
Me: Why are you doing this to me and who are you?(I said to him while gasping for air)
Alien:Aaaaaaa.(he throws me hard to the wall) HOW DARE YOU SPEAK TO YOUR FATHER THAT WAY!
Me:That's Not true, your not my father, my mom tolled me that he was lost at sea.( I said to him while trying to pick myself off the floor)
Alien: Is that what she told you, well she's Wrong! I am your father and I will get my revenge for what your friends did to me! Oh and by the way ( he pulls out a gun in front of me), happy late birthday.(he pulls the trigger and shoots me)

~~~~~~~~[back in my room]~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Link: Please wake up.(I muttered to myself while sitting in a chair next to her)
Dr. C: Link, please come out, she'll be awake soon I promise.(Doc said to me in a worried tone)
Link: (sigh) Ok Doc, I'll be out in a sec.( I said back to him in depression)
I got up from my chair and kissed Magalie on the cheek.
When I was starting to walk out of her room, I stopped when I heard her scream and ran back to her.
Magalie: Aaaaaaaaaaaa...
Link: Magalie! Your finally awake!( I ran back to her and hugged her with tears of joy streaming down my face)
Me: Link, your suffocating me.
Link: Oh, sorry, I'm just happy now that your awake.( he stopped hugging me and wiped off the tears from his face)
Me: I missed you too and how long was I out?
Link: You were out for nearly a month.
Me: That long?
Link: Ya. So what happened to you back in New Orleans?
Me: I'll tell you right now but first, lets go to the main room with the others.
Link: Yea your right and you must be starving right about now.
Me: Ya.(I said to him with a little giggle)
When we got into the main room, the others jumped out of there seats and ran to me and Link.
Susan:Magalie, thank god your awake now, you gave us quit a scare back in New Orleans.
Dr. C:Quit in deed, so what happen to you that made you pass out like that my dear?
Me: Well I had....
I was interrupted by the general as he flies in.
Monger:Monsters you...(he stopped and saw me wake)Aw Transformica, your up now, so Link you will stay here and take care of Transformica, for the rest of you, you'll be in sand deigo Fighting off a giant spider.
Susan: You can tell us the story later when we come back.
Me: Ok, good luck you guys.
They left a short time after and now its only Link and I in the room.

[drcockroach]

ch8

Its all ready been an hour and Link hasn't said a word to me after the others left to fight the spider.
Me: Link, are you ok? You haven't said a word to me for an hour, is something wrong?
Link:What,no every things fine, I just want to know what you stopped you from kissing me back in New Orleans?
Me: I'll tell you but first let me give you that kiss from the mission.
Link:ok, pucker up sweet thang.(he said to me and puckered up his lips)
I leaned close to him(sitting on his lap) and when our lips touched, it felt like a whole new world has opened up ,angles singing around us and fire works going off in the back ground. But when me and Link started to kiss, Susan walks in.
Susan: Were ba....( she stopped her sentence and notice me kissing link)
I got off Link and Link was wiping of the lipstick off him.Our face started to turn red but luck for us it was only Susan and not Dr. Cockroach or Bob.
Susan: I'm sorry, I didn't mean to come in on your guys.
Me: It's ok, better you and not Dr.c or Bob.
Link: Yea, Doc will make me feel a little weird the next time i kiss Magalie. So thank good it was you.
Me:you wont tell the others about me and Link being together, right?
Susan: My lips are sealed.
After that, the others came in.
Dr.C:Aw now,where were we. I remember now, Magalie you were telling us what happened back in New Orleans.
Me:Yea, well i had a vision of some sort. I was inside an alien space craft and the alien had me in his grip. He then threw me hard to a wall and yield at me saying that he's my father. I tried to get up but when i got up he pulled out a gun and shot me. The last words he said to me before he shot me was that he will get his revenge on you guys and that his name was Gallaxhar.
I saw all my friends eyes widen when i said his name.
Link: Magalie, did you say Gallaxhar?
Me:Yes why, is some thing wrong?
Susan: I thought he died from the explosion a few months ago?
Dr.C: As so did I.
Me: wait, what? what are you guys talking about here?
Dr.C: Well Magalie a few months ago, we saved the world from him and we thought he died from the self destruct.
Susan: But we guessed wrong then because he's back.
Me: so how do we know who he's going after? Because if I am really his daughter, will he get me first and use me as a trap?
Dr. C: Time will only tell, until then, here wear this.
He hand me a little device.
Me:What is ti doctor?
Dr.C: its a tracer devise, I have more back in my cell. If Gallaxhar is going to take one of us, we can find out where hes hiding and we can save him or her.
Me:Ok.
(in my mind) Great, just great.I'm not only part monster, I'm part alien and my father are my friends number one nemeses. I hope this doesn't go between me and link.
I walk away from my friends and went to the other side of the room.
Bob:Transformica, are you ok?
Me:(I look up at Bob wiping the tears off my face)Yea, I'm ok, I'm just ...I just don't want to talk about it.
Link:hey, hey, its ok, you can tell us.
Susan:yea you can trust us.
Me:ok, its just that i don't want you guys to get hurt. And if you guys do get hurt from my dad, I'll feel like i did it.
Dr.C: Now my dear, we'll be fine, it is you who were worrying about. If he harms you in any way we'll be the one's that did it.
Susan:Yea besides, we'll be ready for him, right guys.
Others:right.
Me:thanks(wiping my tears)I... I just need to be alone for a while.
I walk back into my cell, leaving my friends in the room worried about me. I'm getting worried not only of my friends but thinking of what I might become of me if my father gets me and might use me as bate to trap my friends or even worse, make me hurt them.

[drcockroach]

CH9

~~~~~~~[middle of the night]~~~~~~~~~

(recording on a tape recorder)
Dear friends, if you find this message,I'm dead.I just can't live my life if my dad hurts you, so the only way he cant find us is me killing my self.I'm sorry it has to end this way, I'll miss you all, especially you Link.
(I go to my bag and i take out a pocket knife, but when i was about to kill my self, Gallaxhar comes in from behind me)*recorder still recording*
Me: how did you get in here?!?!
Gallaxhar: I'm Here for you.
He grabs me and covers my mouth.He spoted the recorder and used it.
Gallaxhar:Attention all monsters, I have captured my daughter and I will kill her, if you want her to live, meet me in the grand canyon or else its death for her.
Me: Don't do it, i'll be fine!
Gallaxhar:Do it or else!Gallaxhar out.

~~~~~~~[the next morning]~~~~~~~~~~~~

Link:Good morning you guys.(I look around for Magalie)Hey,wheres Magalie?
Susan:She hasn't come out of her cell yet, here let me go check on her.
~~~~~~~[in magalies cell]~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Susan:Magalie are you in here?(I look around the room but know one in, i find a recorder and take it out to the others)
Susan:You guys, Magalie is missing!
Dr.C:Are you sure?
Susan:yes, all i found was this.
(i hand the recorder to doc and he turns it on)
Recorder:
Dear friends, if you find this message, I'm Dead. I just cant live my life if my dad hurt you, so the only way he cant find us is me killing my self.I'm sorry it has to end this way,I'll miss you all, especially you link.How did you get in here?I'm here for you.*noises of a struggle*
Attention all monsters, i have captured my daughter and i will kill her, if you want her to live, meet me in the Grand canyon or else its death for her.don't do it, i'll be fine!Do it or else!Gallaxhar out.
We all stood in silence until link broke it.
Link:Why are we standing around, lets go save her!
All:Right!
We all went to the general and tolled him what happened.After that,we went into the jet and took off to the grand canyon.

~~~~~~~[inside the ship]~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Me:*he has me strap down on a table*Why are you doing this to me?I cant believe you would hurt your own daughter for your own little game!
My dad:Honey, I would never hurt you.(he said sarcastically and pulls out a giant needle)
Me:Then whats that for?
Dad:Oh , this right here, well I'm going to inject inside you a chemical that will let me control you and besides, your changing to my kind as we speak.
Me:I don't believe you!(I yield at him)
Dad:No, take a look for your self.(he pulls out a mirror and i see my skin has changed from a lite brown to a bluish gray)
When i was detracted from the color of my skin, he injected in me the chemical.
Gallaxhar:So, how do you feel now, 'my little princess'?
Magalie: I am fine, i will follow your every word,say it and I will follow it father.
Galaxhar:Puuuuurrrrrrrrrrrrrrfffffffffffffeeeeeeeeeccccccccct.Nothing will get in my way this time, isn't that right'baby girl'.
magalie:yes.
Gallaxhar:muhahahahahahahahahahahahahaha!

[drcockroach]

CH10 Please Don't Die on ME

~~~~~~~~[inside the jet]~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Link:don't worry Magalie, I'm coming.(I muttered to myself as I wait for the plane to get to our destination)

Susan:Don't worry Link, she'll be alright.We just need to believe in her, thats all.

Link:Thanks Susan, you always know what to say.(As i gave her a smile)

General:Monsters Were Here.
We went in side the ship and was making a plan to save Magalie.

Dr.C:Ok Link, you and Susan will go and save Magalie.Me and Bob will go to the main power core and set it on self destruct. ok now lets do this.

Me and Susan went off to look for Magalie.We went in to one room and in our luck, Gallaxhar was there.

Susan:OK Gallaxhar,wheres Magalie!(she yield at him with anger)

Gallaxhar:Why,she's right here.(Magalie comes out from behind him but she changed.Her skin is a bluish gray and shes not even trying to get away from Gallaxhar)

Link:Magalie?Magalie!What the hell did you do to her!

Gallaxhar:All I did was inject a chemical that will make her obey my every command,isn't that right'baby girl'.

Magalie:Yes father.(she said in a low tone)

Susan:Magalie snap out of it.

Link:yea,this is not you at all, cant you see hes just using you for his own game.

Gallaxhar:Its no use, she is under my control and there is nothing you can do about it. Magalie, destory your friends, starting with the green one.

Magalie:OK.

She start to run at me, I had only one shoot at this.I knew there was a way to break the trans and its me kissing her.As she comes closer to me, i grabed her and kissed her with passion.

Link:I hope this works.(I say to my self in my mind)
After i kissed her, she went back to normal.

Me:aw, what happened?Link?How the,what the,OK,whats going on?

Link:I'll tell you My love whats going on.You were under mind control and i just brooked the trans by kissing you.

Me:thank you.(I hugged him and gave him a kiss on the cheek)

Gallaxhar:Why You!(he pulls out his gun and aims for Link)

Me:Link, Watch out!(I push him away but got hit in the chest instead)

Susan&Link:Magalie!(link has me in his arms and i'm coughing blood all over him)

Link:Magalie, please stay alive,please dont die on me.(he said with tears falling down from his face)

Me:Don't worry, I'll be fine,Susan,take me to Doc,he knows what to do and link if i do die, I will always know that I died with love.

Link:Susan hurry,take her to Doc,I'll Handle him my self.

Susan:OK

Link:How can you do this to her!You make me sick.(I Run towards him and punched him in the face making him pass out. I then grabbed his gun and shoot him so we will never hear from him again)

*Computer*
Warning, warning
Ship will self destruct in two minutes.
I ran out of the ship and got inside the plane where i saw Doc trying his best to Keep Magalie alive.

Link:How is she Doc?

Dr.C:Not that good.We need to hurry to get back at the facility right away,She is going to need surgery if she is to live.
I sit next to her holding her hand.

Me:Link, its going to be Ok, I'm fine, just relax.(I said to him in a almost dieing tone)

Link:Just save your energy,I will always love you no mater what happens to you.

Me:(i gave him a weak smile)
when we got back to the facility, Dr.Cockroach rushes me in to the emergency room and operates on me.

[drcockroach]

CH11 I'm Alive!

~~~~~~~[5 hours later in the main room]~~~~~~~~~~~~

Link:(I was pacing back and forth for Doc to come out with the news if Magalie is going to live or not)
I hear the cell door open and saw Doc walk in.

Link:Doc,is Magalie ok?(I asked him in a worried tone)

Dr.C:Why don't you ask her your self.(He steps out to the side and Magalie comes in.*in a wheel chair*)

Bob:Hey Transformica, how long will you be in that chair?(He asks me and every one looks at him in a mad way)

Me:*giggle*I'm going to be in a wheel chair only for a couple of days before I get use to my new left leg.(I showed them my fake left leg)

Susan:I thought Gallaxhar shot you in the chest?

Link:Yea, me too.

Me:Well when he gave me the shot that made him control me, he injected it in my left leg.So when I got shot from the gun, all the energy went threw my whole body and infected my left leg.

Dr.C:I managed to stop the proses from getting worse but it was to late for her left leg.

Susan:The good thing is that your still alive.

Me:yeah, I would have missed you guy if I died in the ship or tried to do suicide.
I then rolled my way to the table where I was finishing up a picture.

Link:Hey Magalie.

Me:hi link.(I said to him shy because I didn't know if he still likes me or not from what happened on the ship)

Link: Magalie do you want me to help you with any thing?Any thing at all?

Me:actually,there is one thing you can help me with,I really feel tiered and what to go to sleep so can you help me get off from the wheel chair and into my bed?

Link:sure thing.
He rolls me into my cell and helps me sit on the bed.

Link:any thing else.

Me:yea,here's a little something something for rescuing me.
I lean close to link and kissed him with passion.It felt good when he was moving his hand up and down on my back, I could feel both our tongues hitting each other.When we stopped we both kissed each other on the cheek and said good night.