Help with my character?

[RF]

Meet Killgore:



He is a new character that I've just created, a killer whale. The problem is that I don't have any ideas on what to do with him. What type of powers should he have, his weaknesses, etc...I'm stuck. I know I want him to be evil, but other than that...I'm not sure if it's allowed to ask for help on creating a new character, so I'll delete this if it's not But thanks for any help in advance! Killgore is going to be used for roleplays and stories - credit will be given to you if I use one of your ideas. Thanks again!

[Crazyrabidpony]

Hmmm... how about the ability to control water and fire radioactive waterballs from his mouth?

[DolphinLight]

Since he's a killer whale he's pretty much stuck in the water...but maybe you could come up with a way so that he can come out of the water at times.

[RF]

Yeah, I thought about that problem...I'll have to think of something...Thanks for your suggestions, Crazyrabidpony!

[Crazyrabidpony]

You're welcome! For controling water, he can surround his body with it, allowing him go to upon land. ^^

[Blackboxx]

An evil killer whale... Don't see many of those. Do you have a personality instilled? If not, I'd advise you to avoid typical villain stuff; world domination for the heck of it, evil laughing, monologues, explaining their plan in great detail to the heroes. It can be a challenge to find ways to explain their motivation without it sounding forced, or like the villain is a cocky SOB ("I'll just tell you as a convenient device so that the reader knows what I'm thinking").

And as for weaknesses, obviously, constant need for water in order to move. Someone mentioned the ability to control water as a way to allow him to be more menacing and viable. It's a good idea, but now it breaks his weakness. So something else needs to weigh him/her down. Perhaps lack of food while on land? Inability to filter water, so the slightest of pollution will make him sick/weak? That could also be a motivation for evil; anger at pollution. Not entirely original, but it gives the villain a little depth and relatability.

[Nobility]

The fact he's a giant evil killer whale already means he's pretty much bursting with originality, so kudos to you. As for personality and powers, well, first, you've gotta determine his origin and what kind of villain he is. Is he a humorous type of villain or is he serious? Is he powerful or is he weak? Was he mutated into the form he now possesses or was he born this way, like he was made in a labratory? Can he speak human, or is he like Insectosaurus, and forced to speak gibberish? Is he a mindless monster, or does he actually possess the brain of a scientist?

Really, though, the most important question I believe you need to answer is whether or not he's supposed to be taken seriously or if he's as goofy as Gallaxhar.

[RF]

1. Is he a humorous type of villain or is he serious?

-Serious. He's not at all comical like Gallaxhar.

2. Is he powerful or is he weak?

-Powerful.

3. Was he mutated into the form he now possesses or was he born this way?

-Mutated. I have a backstory thought out that I will post along with his profile

4. Can he speak human, or is he like Insectosaurus, and forced to speak gibberish?

-No, he can't speak human. He uses a series of clicks and squeals like a normal orca would, though these sound more haunting.

Thanks Nobility!

[xThexJadedxBugx]

Hmmm, I wonder what Link would think of him...

I mean, they're both in a way fish-like, even though technically a Whale is a mammal and not a fish, so I'm wrong on the one. But yeah, you know what I mean. What your villain saw Link as some sort of treat to whatever form of eviley evilness that goes through his mind? They both can swim in water, they can breath under it, ext...

Wait, Whales don't have gills,, right? I need to refresh on my biology x]

[RF]

xD That sounds like a good idea...maybe I'll just have underwater breathing as one of his powers...I've decided that the only other power he'll have is super strength. I don't want him to be able to go up on land because then otherwise he'd be practically unbeatable and that wouldn't be fair. And it's not like he'll turn good and help the monsters fight other battles, then he wouldn't be able to go help them anyway. Here is the backstory I have for him.

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Killgore was captured from his home in the ocean as a regular orca and sent to a secret underwater lab. Scientists put him through painful experiments trying to find something that would help cure a certain disease. The end resulted in creating a lethal monster who wrecked havoc upon the entire facility with newfound strength, and Killgore managed to escape back out into the ocean.

Short... but does that sound okay for a backstory?

[Blackboxx]

It's a bit... predictable, but don't let that perturb you. Heck, MVA was pretty predictable itself and I loved it. It's all a matter of how it's done. Depth, dialogue, and personality can more than make up for simple backstory.

Also, how would he escape? Isn't he helpless when out of water? Did they for some reason connect his tank (or wherever he was being held) to the ocean, giving him an escape route? If you already have an answer and don't wish to spoil it, please don't. I'm just trying to give some constructive criticism.

Like I said, evil killer whales are few and far between. The idea is good, now you need to flesh him out. Always ask yourself 'why is the character doing this?', and try to come up with a unique answer. If you can't, don't worry. A few repeated facets to a character are fine.

[RF]

May 14, 2009 16:13:52 GMT -5 Blackboxx said:

It's a bit... predictable, but don't let that perturb you. Heck, MVA was pretty predictable itself and I loved it.

^I was enjoying the movie too much to care to guess what was going to happen next the first time I saw it, lol. But back to the character...

Why is he doing this? Well, to escape the scientists and the experiments, of course. Now he sees all humans as enemies who should never be trusted and would be glad if they fell from the face of the earth. Yeah, I have an idea on how he escapes the lab, too

[Blackboxx]

That's good. So long as you have a plan.

And I didn't mean specifically why he's evil or hates people. More along the lines of why does he do anything. Each and every action should have a reason, and it should gel with his personality and motive(s). Whatever you make him do (no matter how insignificant it may seem), make sure you, and the reader know why. It doesn't have to be right away (suspense works marvels), but at some point, all details should be explained.

This is just advice, not an attempt to press you for more info. You sound like you know where this is going. So good luck!

[RF]

Ah, okay. Thank you for the help, Blackboxx